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@@ -33,11 +33,12 @@ operations led him to great power politically as a member of the
 ruling inner circle, the Politburo. This was because of the power and
 flexibility afforded to the rulers of the state by the actions of the
 Stasi, leading the party to encourage and fund the work of the Stasi.
-The authoritarian stance of the ruling party existed not only in high
-level politics, but in the daily lives of the individual.  In this
-way, surveillance is much like propaganda.  In a way that is not
-immediately obvious, surveillance is able to have a widespread impact
-on individuals according to the wishes of those in power.
+The leadership could through high level politics outsource involvement
+on a much lower level to the Stasi and maintain their authoritarian
+positions more effectively. In this way, surveillance is much like
+propaganda.  In a way that is not immediately obvious, surveillance is
+able to have a widespread impact on individuals according to the
+wishes of those in power.
 
 In the GDR, those in power wanted to actively control the lives of
 their citizens, and ensure behaviour according to the rules of the
@@ -72,29 +73,46 @@ that we carry around with us as granted.
 
 Whilst the Stasi operated, there often seemed a need to justify its
 actions, either politically or to the people. The East German
-authorities presented themselves as acting against Fascism and for
-the people as a very strong reaction to the Nazis. Much as the
-authorities held mock elections that were held, where the SED would
-always win as well as the Berlin Wall which the authorities in the GDR
-would describe as an Anti-Fascist measure (*Antifaschistischer
-Schutzwall*), the actions of authoritarianism are often explained in
-some way that appears genuine. Similarly, surveillance is often
-described in a similar way. In our own lives we may see heavy
-surveillance explained as preventing crime or terrorism. Similarly the
-Stasi's reported purpose is visible in its name the Ministry for State
-Security (*Ministerium für Staatssicherheit*). Here the reasoning for
-surveillance is presented just as the elections and wall were; as a
-genuine and necessary part of East German society. In this case, the
-Stasi justified its existence to the people in a rather dangerous way.
-By presenting itself as protecting the people whilst instead working
-against them and treating many of them as enemies of the state, the
-Stasi presented outwardly a rather different image to what it was.
-Although many East Germans surely knew of its true purpose, the naming
-and presentation gives the opportunity for one to see the actions of
-the Stasi in a good light and accept as necessary as it described
-itself. It is by this alongside the other tools of authoritarianism
-including the Stasi's practices that the Stasi was able to recruit so
-many officers and informants.
+authorities presented themselves as acting for the people and
+particularly against Fascism as part of a very strong reaction to a
+previously Nazi Germany.  Just as the authorities held mock elections,
+where the SED would always win and the description of the Berlin Wall
+as an Anti-Fascist measure (*Antifaschistischer Schutzwall*), the
+actions of authoritarianism are often explained in some way that
+appears genuine.  Similarly, surveillance by the Stasi was presented
+as acting for the protection of people.  In our own lives we may see
+heavy surveillance explained as preventing crime or terrorism.
+Similarly the Stasi's supposed purpose is visible in its name: the
+Ministry for State Security (*Ministerium für Staatssicherheit*). Here
+the reasoning for surveillance is presented just as the elections and
+wall were; as a genuine and necessary part of East German society.
+
+Such presentations and justifications of surveillance are rather
+interesting.  The Stasi alongside other authoritarian measures in the
+GDR justified their existences to the people in a rather dangerous
+way.  By presenting itself as protecting the people whilst instead
+working against them and treating many of them as enemies of the
+state, the Stasi presented outwardly a rather different image to what
+it was.  Although many East Germans surely knew of its true purpose,
+the naming and presentation gives the opportunity for one to see the
+actions of the Stasi in a good light and accept as necessary as it
+described itself.  We may often here in discussions of state
+surveillance, that if one has nothing to hide then there is no issue
+in heavy usage of surveillance. It is this sentiment that Anna Funder
+describes in Stasiland when discussing her conversation with a man in
+the park in reference to the Berlin Wall: "I know this argument as
+well: if you didn’t buck the system, then it wouldn’t harm you.  But,
+from what I have seen, it probably would." The potential for one to
+accept or ignore the authoritarian measures of a surveillance agency
+may have to do with the image they assert, as looking out for people.
+It is by this that might have drawn people to join the Stasi and work
+for the state: the belief that doing so is upholding the law and
+living in the right way.  Funder's Stasiland discusses this also
+when an ex-Stasi officer, Herr Christian, describes his reasons
+for joining the Stasi: "but he stayed with the Firm [Stasi]. ‘I’ve
+always had an acute sense of duty to obey the law,’ he says,
+‘and I thought it was the right thing to do.’"
+
 
 The Stasi came to an unexpected end. Following the declining interest
 of the previously heavily invested Soviet Union in maintaining a
@@ -129,13 +147,17 @@ allowing in outside knowledge.
 
 Arguably, this is where the Stasi could have done more work to further
 exert and maintain control over the people. The ability of people to
-listen to outside broadcasting afforded great influence to West
-Germany and NATO in East German borders [@npr-radio;@nyt-television].
-Censorship can thusly be viewed as a very powerful tool of
-authoritarianism, and the lack of limitation by the Stasi on what
-people were watching and listening to may have disintegrated the other
-tools of propaganda and disinformation that the authorities were
-naturally trying to simultaneously leverage.
+listen to outside broadcasting afforded influence to West Germans and
+NATO in East German borders with relatively little effort
+[@npr-radio;@nyt-television].  Censorship can thusly be viewed as a
+very powerful tool of authoritarianism and one that can be performed
+by surveillance organisations. The Stasi's failure to prevent people
+watching and listening to foreign broadcasts may have disintegrated
+the other tools of propaganda and disinformation that the authorities
+were naturally trying to simultaneously leverage. The information
+people were given now had a basis for being untrue through West German
+broadcasting and may have indeed had a large contribution to the
+events at the end of the East German state.
 
 In a sense the reality of the Stasi and the ways in which it impacted
 the lives of people in East Germany present us with an opportunity to
@@ -158,6 +180,8 @@ about the Stasi provides is a very valuable one, given the clear view
 and judgement we are able to have on it and thus our potential to
 learn more from it than other examples of surveillance.
 
-<-- horrible ending
+<-- horrible 
+
+Surveillance exists in an interesting 
 
 # References and bibliography